A nurse appeared in the door way.
“Johnny” she said gently “your mother's" here to see you”. Johnny’s heart dropped
and a number of bad memories came rushing in, “please I don’t want to see her”
he said to the nurse but it was too late she had already walked out when his
mother walked in.
“Don’t wanna see your own mother” Johnny’s mom said walking to sit next to the bed where her only child was laying. Then knowing she can’t but does it anyway she lights a weed inhaling then exhaling and says “Those damn hoods have brain washed you Johnny, don’t even wanna see your own mother huh , my only son a murderer at 16." The room was filled with silence except for the machines in the room beeping and beeping.
"WHAT WHERE YOU THINKING?!"
Johnny finally spoke up " I WAS PROTECTING A PERSON THAT IS ACTUALLY FAMILY SOMEONE I CARE AND LOVE UNLIKE YOU" , "mom" , "just get out of here please when I needed you, you where never there so what makes you think I need you now. "Get out of here there's no use having a alcoholic as a mother and a father who's hobby is beating you." Now go, when you walk out of that door that will be a example of you walking out of my life I don't need you." She took her time but walked out without saying a word.
at that time the nurse walked in and said "you okay Johnny?," "yes" he replied.
“Don’t wanna see your own mother” Johnny’s mom said walking to sit next to the bed where her only child was laying. Then knowing she can’t but does it anyway she lights a weed inhaling then exhaling and says “Those damn hoods have brain washed you Johnny, don’t even wanna see your own mother huh , my only son a murderer at 16." The room was filled with silence except for the machines in the room beeping and beeping.
"WHAT WHERE YOU THINKING?!"
Johnny finally spoke up " I WAS PROTECTING A PERSON THAT IS ACTUALLY FAMILY SOMEONE I CARE AND LOVE UNLIKE YOU" , "mom" , "just get out of here please when I needed you, you where never there so what makes you think I need you now. "Get out of here there's no use having a alcoholic as a mother and a father who's hobby is beating you." Now go, when you walk out of that door that will be a example of you walking out of my life I don't need you." She took her time but walked out without saying a word.
at that time the nurse walked in and said "you okay Johnny?," "yes" he replied.
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ReplyDeletePlease go back and fix your dialogue punctuation. Example: "Johnny," she said gently. "Your mother's here to see you." (End punctuation goes inside the quotation marks. Be sure to include a comma if your dialogue is interrupted with 'she said' or 'said Johnny'.
ReplyDeleteAlso, be sure to start a new paragraph when you change speakers.
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