Assignment

Your Task: Rewrite the hospital scene where Johnny's mother comes to visit. In your version, the nurse does not turn her away, but lets her in the room. Imagine Johnny's reaction. What would Johnny's mother say to him? What would Johnny say to her?

You are writing part of a narrative, not a script. Sentences, punctuation, and paragraphs should appear the way it would in a book. Use the book or passage above as an example. Pay special attention to the dialogue and how the author starts a new paragraph each time she changes speakers.

Thursday, May 21, 2015


A nurse appeared in the doorway. “Johnny,” she said quietly, “your mother’s here to see you.”

Johnny opened his eyes. At first they were wide with surprise, then they darkened. “I don’t want to see her,” he said firmly.

“She’s your mother.”

“I said I don’t want to see her!” he shouted. “Tell her to leave…”

The nurse stepped aside and in walked his mother. She looked at her son, lying on the hospital bed; dying. Immediately, she starts crying. She collapses on the floor, in fetal position crying.

“Johnny,” she began, “I’m sorry for everything that's ever happened to you. Especially this."

"I don't need your pity." Johnny muttered "GET OUT. NOW. NOW NOW NOW NOW NOW NOW NOW NOW!"
"You cannot tell me what to do young man!" she slaps him hard across the face.

"GET OOOOUUUUUUUUTTTTTTTTT!" Pony yells and she exits with a smug grin on her face.
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