Assignment

Your Task: Rewrite the hospital scene where Johnny's mother comes to visit. In your version, the nurse does not turn her away, but lets her in the room. Imagine Johnny's reaction. What would Johnny's mother say to him? What would Johnny say to her?

You are writing part of a narrative, not a script. Sentences, punctuation, and paragraphs should appear the way it would in a book. Use the book or passage above as an example. Pay special attention to the dialogue and how the author starts a new paragraph each time she changes speakers.

Thursday, May 28, 2015

A nurse appeared in the doorway. "Johnny," she said quietly, " your mothers here to see you."
   Johnny opened his eyes wide at first but then his face went cold, then said "I don't want to see her," he said firmly.
"She is your mother." The nurse said with a worried voice.
    "I said I don't want to see her." his voice was rising at the nurse. "She's probably here to tell me about all the troubles I have caused her and the old man'll be when I'm dead. Well tell her to leave me alone .For once" -his voice broke and it was silent for a minute- then he said "for once just to leave me alone." "he was struggling to sit up, but he sat up after the fifth try to sit up.
The nurse said, "Well I will go let her in and give you some privacy to talk for a little bit then you can rest you have had a long day so far and I don't want you to get all worked up and stressed after your visit with your mother."
"I said I don't want to see her!" Don't you ever listen?" Johnny was furious.
Instead of answering Johnny she turned to open the door and walked out and told his mom that she could see him.

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